Yeah that's annoying, I hate when people do that, but because of her style of writing, which is like a middle school/high schooler, it's hard not to do. My main thing would be, instead of describing the color, which it's okay if you do it a couple times, describe the emotion: I looked into his loving eyes, I looked into his tortured eyes, I looked into his tear-filled eyes.
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